request for review of Ubuntu 9.04 beta release announcement

[Matt Zimmerman]

On Wed, Mar 25, 2009 at 06:59:30PM -0700, Steve Langasek wrote:
> Hi all,
> 
> Here is a draft for the Ubuntu 9.04 beta email announcement:
> 
>   https://wiki.ubuntu.com/JauntyJackalope/BetaAnnouncement
> 
> Please review and advise me of any problems.

Quote:
> Faster boot times:  an extensive review of Ubuntu's boot-time code means
> you can spend less time waiting and more time being productive with your
> Ubuntu desktop.

Reviewing the boot-time code doesn't make it any faster. :-)

How about: improvements to Ubuntu's startup process mean...?

Notification system: if I didn't already know what this was, I wouldn't
understand from this paragraph (what's a notification? what does it do?).
It should either include a brief explanation (if possible), or link to a
page which explains what this is all about.  Julian should be able to help.

> Cloud computing:  using Eucalyptus technology, the latest release of
> Ubuntu will bring Amazon Elastic Compute Cloud (EC2)-like infrastructure
> capabilities inside the firewall

This is a bit awkward.  How about:

"Eucalyptus puts you in control of your own cloud computing infrastructure,
compatible with Amazon's Elastic Compute Cloud (EC2) but running on your own
servers behind your firewall."

-- 
 - mdz