Request for proofreading of release announcement mail

[Vadim Peretokin]

This might somewhat silly, but I had a few people ask me "Which version of
Ubuntu do I get?", them all being on laptops. Could it say - "Ubuntu is a
Linux distribution for your desktop, laptop or server" - since that doesn't
specify the versions of Ubuntu explicitly, it should be fine.

Just an idea.


On 10/17/07, Bhuvaneswaran A <bhuvan at ubuntu.com> wrote:
>
> On 10/17/07, Steve Langasek <steve.langasek at canonical.com> wrote:
> > Hi again,
> >
> > A draft for the Ubuntu 7.10 email announcement is now available at
> > <https://wiki.ubuntu.com/GutsyGibbon/ReleaseAnnouncement>.  Please
> review
> > and advise me (in cc:, please) of any problems.
> >
> > Following the pattern of past release announcements, this draft is light
> on
> > technical detail, referring to pending press releases, the release
> notes,
> > and the upgrade guide for most of the meat.  Kubuntu and Edubuntu are
> linked
> > to from this mail; Xubuntu and Gobuntu are expected to announce
> separately.
> >
> > Comments?
>
> I propose following changes:
>
> a) In "To Get Ubuntu 7.10" section, we can also mention that the user
> can order a copy of CD from shipit.ubuntu.com website.
> b) In same section, I recommend to modify the following sentence:
>
> """We recommend that all users read the release notes, which will document
> any caveats and workarounds for known issues.  They are available at:"""
>
> as
>
> """We recommend you to read the release notes, where we have
> documented the caveats and workarounds for known issues. The release
> notes is available at:"""
>
> Hope it helps! Thank you!
> --
> Regards,
> Bhuvaneswaran A
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