Request for proofreading of release announcement mail

[Bhuvaneswaran A]

On 10/17/07, Steve Langasek <steve.langasek at canonical.com> wrote:
> Hi again,
>
> A draft for the Ubuntu 7.10 email announcement is now available at
> <https://wiki.ubuntu.com/GutsyGibbon/ReleaseAnnouncement>.  Please review
> and advise me (in cc:, please) of any problems.
>
> Following the pattern of past release announcements, this draft is light on
> technical detail, referring to pending press releases, the release notes,
> and the upgrade guide for most of the meat.  Kubuntu and Edubuntu are linked
> to from this mail; Xubuntu and Gobuntu are expected to announce separately.
>
> Comments?

I propose following changes:

a) In "To Get Ubuntu 7.10" section, we can also mention that the user
can order a copy of CD from shipit.ubuntu.com website.
b) In same section, I recommend to modify the following sentence:

"""We recommend that all users read the release notes, which will document
any caveats and workarounds for known issues.  They are available at:"""

as

"""We recommend you to read the release notes, where we have
documented the caveats and workarounds for known issues. The release
notes is available at:"""

Hope it helps! Thank you!
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Bhuvaneswaran A
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