request for review of Ubuntu 9.10 release announcement

[Mark C. Miller]

On Tue, 27 Oct 2009 10:14:22 -0700, Steve Langasek wrote:

> Hi again,
> 
> The draft for the Ubuntu 9.10 release announcement is available here:
> 
>   https://wiki.ubuntu.com/KarmicKoala/ReleaseAnnouncement
> 
> Please review and advise me of any corrections that should be made.
> 
> Thanks,

The first (opening) sentence could benefit from the addition of a verb.  
I've suggested "the release of"



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Mark C. Miller, Indianapolis Indiana USA