request for review of Ubuntu 9.10 release announcement

Mark C. Miller mr.mcmiller at
Tue Oct 27 23:13:23 UTC 2009

On Tue, 27 Oct 2009 10:14:22 -0700, Steve Langasek wrote:

> Hi again,
> The draft for the Ubuntu 9.10 release announcement is available here:
> Please review and advise me of any corrections that should be made.
> Thanks,

The first (opening) sentence could benefit from the addition of a verb.  
I've suggested "the release of"

Mark C. Miller, Indianapolis Indiana USA

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