request for review of Ubuntu 9.04 beta release announcement

[Dougie Richardson]

2009/3/26 Steve Langasek <steve.langasek at canonical.com>:
> Hi all,
>
> Here is a draft for the Ubuntu 9.04 beta email announcement:
>
>  https://wiki.ubuntu.com/JauntyJackalope/BetaAnnouncement
>
> Please review and advise me of any problems.
>
> Thanks,
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Nice and clear Steve, my only suggestions is to add the word
"editions" to the end of the first sentence - at the moment it might
read to some as though there is one image;

"The Ubuntu team is pleased to announce the beta release of Ubuntu 9.04
Desktop and Server editions."

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Regards,

Dougie Richardson
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