Request for proofreading of release announcement mail

Steve Langasek steve.langasek at canonical.com
Wed Oct 17 19:50:23 UTC 2007


On Wed, Oct 17, 2007 at 10:14:51AM +0100, Matt Zimmerman wrote:
> Some editorial feedback:

>  * I think the "Ubuntu is..." paragraph has a few too many clauses in it.
>    I've split it into two sentences, and moved the support info into a
>    separate paragraph (fixed)

>  * The URLs for the release notes and tour should be indented like the others (fixed)

>  * "Helping Shape Ubuntu" should specifically mention the upcoming developer
>    summit and link to the information page (fixed)

>  * It should explain that the release notes will contain important
>    information, including caveats and workarounds for known issues (fixed)

Thanks for all of these, looks good to me!




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