Request for proofreading of release announcement mail
steve.langasek at canonical.com
Wed Oct 17 19:50:23 UTC 2007
On Wed, Oct 17, 2007 at 10:14:51AM +0100, Matt Zimmerman wrote:
> Some editorial feedback:
> * I think the "Ubuntu is..." paragraph has a few too many clauses in it.
> I've split it into two sentences, and moved the support info into a
> separate paragraph (fixed)
> * The URLs for the release notes and tour should be indented like the others (fixed)
> * "Helping Shape Ubuntu" should specifically mention the upcoming developer
> summit and link to the information page (fixed)
> * It should explain that the release notes will contain important
> information, including caveats and workarounds for known issues (fixed)
Thanks for all of these, looks good to me!
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