serverguide - couple of comments

Matthew East mdke at ubuntu.com
Mon Jan 16 15:42:05 UTC 2006


On Mon, 2006-01-16 at 10:24 -0500, Brian Shumate wrote:
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> Matt:
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> I am doing a patch with commands in <screen> to submit for the  
> material I have edited.  So far, it has a weird appearance in Yelp,  
> but that may very well be due to something I've done wrong- I don't  
> know.

What's the trouble? You may need some white spaces before the </screen>
tag, see the source of the preface in serverguide.

> In the specific case of the OpenSSH part of ServerGuide, do  
> you have some examples of the too many words, and overly repeated  
> phrases?

Some of the things I took out are here:

http://lists.ubuntu.com/archives/ubuntu-doc-commits/2006-January/001781.html

Something I noticed was that the guide introduces what a stage will do,
and then explaining again what it does in the section. Also, a sentence
was spent on explaining what the "sudo apt-get install" bit did, which
is not needed.
 
Matt
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