Recent modifications on a wiki page

[Bruce Hyatt]

Checking the English grammar the page is very readable and understandable.
Except for the last two items, these are very minor errors:

para 1, line 1:
...dedicated to easily collecting....

Understanding the Samsung Update Software program, line 2:
Ultrabook (upper case u)

Replicating the steps manually, after the first wget statement:
...which will return.... (I'm almost certain that's the correct term)

What remains to be tested:
...if the EXE file can be run....
The last sentence has no verb. (these last two are the only glaring
grammatical errors)

- Bruce Hyatt

On Tue, Feb 23, 2016 at 6:33 PM, Andrea Lazzarotto <
andrea.lazzarotto at gmail.com> wrote:

> Dear Christopher and other contributors,
>
> thank you for your message (and thanks also for sending me a copy
> privately, but don't worry I am subscribed).
>
> 2016-02-23 23:25 GMT+01:00 Christopher M. Penalver <
> christopher.m.penalver at gmail.com>:
>
>> my initial understanding of the change was that it didn't have a fully
>> contained way to find the BIOS update for a given model, and apply it.
>>
>
> Ehm, I guess my first choice for the heading was not very clear.
>
>
>> However, it may be of higher usefulness to present the method in a "do
>> these keyboard click-for-click steps, with the least explanation to confirm
>> a BIOS update is available" way, as if one is the user who doesn't really
>> care about understanding anything, and just wants the steps to perform to
>> move forward.
>>
>
> My fault. I am used to write directions on my blog. Since I hate when
> other people instruct to do stuff without explaining what it does, I tend
> to be very verbose.
>
>
>> A rough skeleton would be:
>> 1) Run sudo dmidecode -t0 to find the the Platform ID.
>> 2) Place this in the URL and download.
>> 3) Update via precise method(s) (in progress).
>>
>
> I like this option, but the details should still be available somewhere.
>
>
>> Despite this, regarding the placement of this information, it still seems
>> better suited to be in https://help.ubuntu.com/community/BIOSUpdate,
>> offering a "one stop shop" nature of BIOS updating that the article intends.
>>
>
> But it's quite long while the other sections look very short. Should we do
> a separate subpage?
>
>
>> Putting such a method at the bottom of a tangentially related article
>> [...] instead of in the main one seems to not place it in the most useful
>> location for folks who are looking to update their BIOS.
>>
>
> Yes... partially. For now the procedure tells you what is the most recent
> BIOS version. I believe this is also related to SamsungBIOS:
>
> *This page is dedicated to easily collect BIOS versions seen in the wild
>> or available to download for Samsung computers*
>
>
> As a side note, I think there was an error in my markup. In the last
> sentence it should read "The ROM file can be flashed by using [...]".
>
> Also, could someone who is a native English speaker check my grammar on
> the page? :) Italy is not well known for the level of English taught in
> schools or academia. ;)
>
> Best regards
>
> --
> Andrea Lazzarotto
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> http://lazza.dk
>
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