potential correction

[Dan 'Da Man']

To Whom It May Concern:

Here's my small contribution to making Ubuntu Docs a bit better.
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=== modified file 'internet/C/adsl.xml'
--- internet/C/adsl.xml	2010-02-27 04:39:34 +0000
+++ internet/C/adsl.xml	2010-09-16 22:30:40 +0000
@@ -15,11 +15,11 @@
 	<title>ADSL Modems</title>
 	<sect1 id="modems-adsl-usb" status="review">
 		<title>USB ADSL Modems</title>				
-		<para>Often parts of ADSL USB modem drivers are proprietary, closed source software and so cannot be supplied with Ubuntu. To get a modem to work with these drivers, you will need to download files from Internet with a computer having a working connection, then transfer the downloaded files to your Ubuntu installation.</para>
-		<para>If you have a modem that can connect both via USB and ethernet, or an ethernet router, you should use the ethernet connection.</para>
-		<para>USB modem installation will require Internet access to download the necessary proprietary drivers. Configuration is beyond the scope of this guide; please see the links to the relevant installation instructions on the Ubuntu community help site, below.</para>
+		<para>Oftentimes drivers for USB ADSL modems are proprietary, closed source software, hence they cannot be supplied with Ubuntu. To get a modem to work with these drivers, you will need to download files from the Internet with a computer that has Internet access, then transfer the downloaded files to your Ubuntu installation.</para>
+		<para>If you have a modem that can connect to a computer via USB and ethernet, or have an ethernet router, you should use the ethernet connection as that is the preferred method to gain access to the Internet.</para>
+		<para>Configuration of the drivers for USB ADSL modems is beyond the scope of this guide; please see the links to the relevant installation instructions on the Ubuntu community help site below.</para>
 		<para>To identify the model of your modem, note the name and number on the front. You may have to look for a label to discover the exact model. Consult the list below to see which driver your modem requires, and note the link.</para>
-		<para>When you go online to download the necessary drivers, you can download the relevant drivers using the links provided.</para>
+		<para>You can download the relevant drivers using the following links.</para>
 
 		<orderedlist numeration='arabic'>
 			<listitem><para>Speedtouch modems:</para>

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