request for review of Ubuntu 9.04 beta release announcement

[Steve Langasek]

On Thu, Mar 26, 2009 at 01:23:40PM +0000, Matt Zimmerman wrote:

> I'd like to suggest that the upgrade instructions be moved earlier in the
> document.  They're currently after the (longish) mirror list, and people may
> not read that far ahead.

Done, thanks.

On Thu, Mar 26, 2009 at 09:26:32AM +0000, Matt Zimmerman wrote:
> On Wed, Mar 25, 2009 at 06:59:30PM -0700, Steve Langasek wrote:
> > Hi all,
> > 
> > Here is a draft for the Ubuntu 9.04 beta email announcement:
> > 
> >   https://wiki.ubuntu.com/JauntyJackalope/BetaAnnouncement
> > 
> > Please review and advise me of any problems.

> s/every-day/everyday/

Fixed.

> I think "cloud environments" is a bit vague; can we use a better term?  The
> sentence as a whole is a bit awkward as well.  How about the more direct:

> "Ubuntu 9.04 Server Edition makes it easy to experiment with cloud computing
> using Eucalyptus on your own servers.  Dynamically create new virtual
> machines on demand, ...other things you can do with it..."

> (remember, this is in universe as a tech preview, not a first-class feature
> yet)

Since this is the overall "what's new in server" summary, I've shortened
this a bit so it's not entirely dominated by the tech preview feature:

  Ubuntu 9.04 Server Edition makes it easy to experiment with cloud
  computing using Eucalyptus on your own servers, and sports an improved
  mail server integration stack based on postfix and dovecot.

On Thu, Mar 26, 2009 at 09:37:43AM +0000, Matt Zimmerman wrote:

> Quote:
> > Faster boot times:  an extensive review of Ubuntu's boot-time code means
> > you can spend less time waiting and more time being productive with your
> > Ubuntu desktop.

> Reviewing the boot-time code doesn't make it any faster. :-)

> How about: improvements to Ubuntu's startup process mean...?

Changed.

> > Cloud computing:  using Eucalyptus technology, the latest release of
> > Ubuntu will bring Amazon Elastic Compute Cloud (EC2)-like infrastructure
> > capabilities inside the firewall
> This is a bit awkward.  How about:

> "Eucalyptus puts you in control of your own cloud computing infrastructure,
> compatible with Amazon's Elastic Compute Cloud (EC2) but running on your own
> servers behind your firewall."

Changed.

On Thu, Mar 26, 2009 at 09:46:41AM +0000, Gerry Carr wrote:
>> Notification system: if I didn't already know what this was, I wouldn't
>> understand from this paragraph (what's a notification? what does it do?).
>> It should either include a brief explanation (if possible), or link to a
>> page which explains what this is all about.  Julian should be able to help.

> Here's the language in the release:
> "Notifications, those alerts that signify a change of status on your  
> system or whether someone is contacting you, have been been made  
> consistent across applications to provide a pleasing, intuitive  
> experience for users.

Ok, I've used this instead, thanks.

>>> Cloud computing:  using Eucalyptus technology, the latest release of
>>> Ubuntu will bring Amazon Elastic Compute Cloud (EC2)-like infrastructure
>>> capabilities inside the firewall

>> This is a bit awkward.  How about:

>> "Eucalyptus puts you in control of your own cloud computing infrastructure,
>> compatible with Amazon's Elastic Compute Cloud (EC2) but running on your own
>> servers behind your firewall."

> I am not sure compatible is the point - is it analogous. How about:

> "Eucalyptus puts you in control of your own cloud computing infrastructure,
> using similar tools and concepts to Amazon's Elastic Compute Cloud (EC2) but running on your own
> servers behind your firewall."

My understanding is that Eucalyptus *is* compatible with EC2 images, and
that this compatibility is a big deal; so I'm going to go with Matt's
wording here.

Thanks,
-- 
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