request for review of Ubuntu 8.04 LTS release announcement

[Steve Langasek]

Hi Duncan,

Thanks for the feedback!

On Wed, Apr 23, 2008 at 09:52:31PM +0200, Duncan Lithgow wrote:
> On Wed, 2008-04-23 at 07:46 -0700, Steve Langasek wrote:
> > Hi all,
> > 
> > Here is a draft for the Ubuntu 8.04 email announcement:
> > 
> >   https://wiki.ubuntu.com/HardyHeron/ReleaseAnnouncement
> > 
> > Please review and advise me (in cc:, please) of any problems.
> 
> * Why the strange language?

> "Ubuntu 8.04 LTS (Long-Term Support) on desktop and server"
> could read:
> "Ubuntu 8.04 LTS (Long-Term Support) for desktops and servers"

> and

> "...supported for three years on the desktop and five years on the
> server."
> could read:
> "...supported for three years on desktops and five years on servers."

> These changes also reflect the way that 'About Ubuntu' is written
> further down the page.

I'm afraid I disagree that this language is strange, and I don't see a
reason to change these.  

> * "Ubuntu 8.04 LTS is also the basis for new 8.04..."
> should read:
> "Ubuntu 8.04 LTS is also the basis for the 8.04..."

> * If we've changed the name then:
> "8.04 also brings with it some changes to Edubuntu, now known as Ubuntu
> Education Edition:" could be: "8.04 also brings with it some changes to
> Ubuntu Education Edition (previously known as Edubuntu.)"

Based on other feedback, this is now changed to: 

  Ubuntu 8.04 LTS is also the basis for the 8.04 release of Kubuntu:

    http://kubuntu.org/news/8.04-release

  8.04 brings a restructuring of Edubuntu as the Ubuntu Education Edition.
  The education desktop and application bundle now installs as an add-on to a
  standard Ubuntu desktop.

    http://www.edubuntu.org/news/8.04-release

  The Ubuntu 8.04 family of variants, Xubuntu, UbuntuStudio, and Mythbuntu,
  are also released today:

    http://www.xubuntu.org/
    http://ubuntustudio.org/
    http://www.mythbuntu.org/


> * I assume you know this link is not up yet:
> http://www.ubuntu.com/getubuntu/releasenotes/804overview

Correct, the website is one of the last things to go up. :)

> * From 'About Ubuntu' install is not a noun, at least not for most people.
> "...with a fast and easy install and regular releases."
> could read:
> "..with fast and easy installation and regular releases."

Fair point, changed in my local copy of the draft.

Thanks again for your review!

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