Request for proofreading of release announcement mail

[Matt Zimmerman]

Some editorial feedback:

 * I think the "Ubuntu is..." paragraph has a few too many clauses in it.
   I've split it into two sentences, and moved the support info into a
   separate paragraph (fixed)

 * The URLs for the release notes and tour should be indented like the others (fixed)

 * "Helping Shape Ubuntu" should specifically mention the upcoming developer
   summit and link to the information page (fixed)

 * It should explain that the release notes will contain important
   information, including caveats and workarounds for known issues (fixed)

On Wed, Oct 17, 2007 at 01:00:45AM -0700, Steve Langasek wrote:
> Hi again,
> 
> A draft for the Ubuntu 7.10 email announcement is now available at
> <https://wiki.ubuntu.com/GutsyGibbon/ReleaseAnnouncement>.  Please review
> and advise me (in cc:, please) of any problems.
> 
> Following the pattern of past release announcements, this draft is light on
> technical detail, referring to pending press releases, the release notes,
> and the upgrade guide for most of the meat.  Kubuntu and Edubuntu are linked
> to from this mail; Xubuntu and Gobuntu are expected to announce separately.
> 
> Comments?
> 

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 - mdz